MistyE's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Mount Mayhem]

Really creative sequence of events and the frame-by-frame animation was great too. Great job and congratulations on getting daily 2nd!

Brewster responds:

Thanks man!

[Sq.E # 3 - Head Lice]

The execution and the animation are both pretty decent. They're not spectacular but they're not bad either, they're just average. And the way you drew the faces seems a bit... familiar. ;) ;)

The problem with this series, though, isn't its execution and animation, it's how bland and one-dimensional all of the writing is. I'm not basing it just on this episode, but on the entire series since I've seen most of the episodes from the original and the new Squishables series.

Most of the series takes place inside school, and what takes place inside school isn't necessarily interesting. Apparently you base most of this series on what happens in your school; when your school has National Croissant Day, you make an episode about it and when your school sends out a head lice newsletter, you make an episode about it. None of these are interesting enough.

The only character in this series that has any depth or personality is Lubch, and he's a jerk and pretty much the antagonist of the series. The students don't have personalities of their own, the way you script each student's dialogue is very generic.

Here's a basic writing formula:

One day, _____________. Because of that, ______________. Because of that, ___________________. Until finally, ___________________. Fill in the blanks with appropriate plot points. But here's what your plot basically is:

Someone has head lice. Lubch leaves. Students get in trouble. The end.

It's not entertaining to watch because the plot isn't interesting enough. What have your other episodes been about? Notebook checks? Binder checks? Tests? If I wanted to hear of those things, I'd just go to school.

The reason people watch animated series is because they want entertainment, not something they can find on a regular basis. Make more interesting stories. Here's an idea, make an episode that's not in school.

Or even make an episode about one student. You normally have Lubch torture the students and you want us to feel bad for the students. Why should we? Why should we feel bad for students we don't know? We won't care about students with no depth.

Take a look at some of the greatest cartoon characters ever, or even some of the crappy cartoon characters like the ones in 6teen that you seem to like so much. Even they are multi-dimensional in a way.

The writing is even incomplete. What happens to the students? What happens about the head lice? It's never said because you abruptly cut it. Impatient? From the sound of the description, you even uploaded it without letting Mabelma finish his inbetweens, that's kind of rude.

In conclusion:

1. Stop writing boring plots. Don't base them off of anything that happens in your school anymore. Make them really interesting. Do you see 6teen making episodes about notebook checks or mismatched socks?

2. Give your characters personalities. They all have the same personality. Your character's personalities shouldn't be the same as your personality.

3. No abrupt endings. Resolve EVERYTHING that was brought up in the beginning, unless it's supposed to be continued yet.

4. Make episodes outside of school. School life is boring. Make episodes about the characters. Give them personalities, give them opinions. Give them their OWN opinions. People tend to like to make characters like themselves but when you make enough characters like yourself that's self-indulgent.

5. Don't be impatient.

TheRealNat23 responds:

Sorry, just wanted to get this out ASAP, but his inbetweens WILL be included. I apologize for being a very good writer. I'll be happy to tell you that not all the upcoming episodes will feature them in school the whole episode with Lubch torturing them. I'll try to give the other characters personalities. What if I make notebook check episodes funny somehow? Does that make an excuse? Now that you mentioned to continue this, I will when I update this. Thanks for the review, I know how to improve my episodes!

[GENERIC ANIME: REBIRTH]

This was a pretty nice parody of a lot of anime cliches. I'd say that the funniest part was the "My parents died when I was child" part, because of where it was placed and because of how it was voice acted.

Visually, it was nice and the animation and character design was great. The only thing that I could see needing improvement would be the background. What you have drawn is nice, though it could use a little more, like maybe trees, rocks, etc.

The backgrounds could really benefit from better color choice, the shade of green used in the background looked like it was one of the default colors in the Flash palette, it looks too bright and vibrant and the green character would look much better if the background wasn't nearly the same shade of green as the character.

Overall, this was a great anime parody that could be even better with improved backgrounds.

P.S. Thank you for the credit!

thebreadandbutter responds:

thank you soooooooo much its nice to see someone appreciate all the time I put into my flashes, and the background thing is because of our current lack of a background designer and me never having any energy after finishing the flash, if you noticed zahtas suffered the same problem

[All Problems Twice Bugs]

did you draw the really tall building because if you did, its good

mrcontesty responds:

Yes I did.

[Youtube in a nutshell]

This is honestly hilarious and animated very well, great job!

brynimation responds:

YEEEEAH! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANKYOU THANKYOU!
It means so much to me when people say positive things about my work. Thanks, means so much to me.

[Some Fall]

Nicely made. The art was simple, but I liked the amount of frame-by-frame animation in this, especially the walk cycle and the swimming. The animation in the beginning was very well done.

The Audio Portal music fit the animation very well. This was fun to watch, but the ending was very abrupt - I didn't expect it. I would suggest having the music fade out before it ends or at least saying "The End."

sleeeeep responds:

Thanks. I was on a dead line and in a rush. But yeah pretty abrupt ending.

[LEGO Mario Adventure!]

An improvement from your Lego Land series.

A lot of the stop-motion movements were very smooth and well-done. I liked the choice of music and the overall idea.

artistunknown responds:

Thanks for the feedback, it's encouraging, and makes me actually want to get back into making stopmotions.

[Pilot Episode]

The art and animation have improved. All of the animated parts before the guy said, "Dude, what are you talking about?" were very good. I like the Willie D Scratch noise (the one you uploaded to the Audio Portal.)

You don't have to re-draw the background for every frame, Willie. Make a layer in Flash and then on that layer, draw the background once.

RogersEntertainment responds:

Thanks Misty i really enjoy making cartoons its my life and you right i dont have to redraw the background in everyframe

[Animator of Willie D]

good update video. but just a tip, plan what you're going to say before you say it.

RogersEntertainment responds:

Okay thanks for the tip :)

[Funky Turtles]

You were trying to maintain a bright cartoony look? You succeeded. I'm going to fan you, I look forward to seeing more cartoons from you.

I like the simple but effective backgrounds and the bright vibrant colors. I really enjoyed this.

Bigfoot3290 responds:

Wow thanks for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed it!